I'm going to skip all the grammar, capitalization, punctuation, etc. Everyone else has told you you need to fix that ^_~
But I'll probably end up repeating Snoink, only with more words.
We need to know who your character is. What has happened in her life for it to be so bad? Why does she resort to suicide, rather than finding a way to pull herself out of her troubles and become a stronger person for it? Why does she not care if her family cares for her death? Was she ever happy? Does she have any friends who will miss her? We need to know more about her and be able to relate to her. So we can care for her, and this suicide will actually have some impact on us rather than just a death.
We need to be given a reason to want to feel sad for her, and cry because she killed herself. Without that you're just capturing a moment of someone's suicide, and it really doesn't make a good story because there is nothing else to it.
Create an actual plot, give us a conflict. She wants to kill herself, but if she does, she may never get to go to Washington DC, and it was her dream since she was a little girl to go. So maybe she has a goal in her life, but her life is too much for her to want to live through. Conflicting, huh? That makes a good story. I'm going to quote something a friend of mine got from an editor, just because I love it and I think it would, in general, help you make a better story: "Look, in our magazine our characters stand up and solve their problems, they don't lie down and whine about it." Make sure your character doesn't lie down and whine about it This rule should apply to all fiction.
Best of luck!
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