Emerson

Hello MID! I've never seen you around before, so how are you? First off, I love your avatar. It's beautiful. She watched as the world fell down around her . ...

This mixed with his oh so alluring scent has left me dizzy, but pleased. You're in present tense, so keep it as such. This mixes with his oh-so-alluring scent has ...

I think you should unbold the main letters of the title. Yes, it draws attention, but it distracts. Let the reader do the realizing, don't for it on them. Also ...

*snickers* I couldn't figure out whether to not read this age old thing out of respect or to poke at it for kicks and giggles. It's so flow of consciousness. ...

I’ve tuned out. Out? What do you mean? My fellow literary magazine nerds shrug. I like this, but it is too heavy. "literary magazine" is heavy phrase, it keeps it ...

Sometimes it’s [remove comma] I slept with my secretary, I stole a hundred dollars from the old woman next door. I wrapped my hand round the cross at my neck ...

, wrapping my dreams in a tight bundle to [s]through[/s] throw overboard. This has some great lines. It wasn't an amazing poem, but it had some good lines. I may ...

I like this, but I hate the repetition. It kills the poem, so I highly suggest you figure out what you are doing with it. twisting tangled up to my ...

Oh, this was beautiful. I think I would have liked if the ending had mentioned something about sewing, that would have been a great image to continue throughout. Your punctuation ...

I think this poem has a lot of potential. It has a certain energy behind it that could work well. The repetition was less annoying than it could have been, ...

He unbolted the door, to find – A blunt figure standing on his porch, coldly gazing at him. I don't like the format of this. You don't need the dash ...

Pengu pointed out a lot of good things, but I think the one big thing is this: Why should the reader care about your speaker? Because as it is, I ...

This was a bit darker than I supposed it would be. Maybe it was just my interpretation of it, but the idea that to be in love with her she ...

This is cute but it's in a slight ragged condition. that everyday you that sits up on the shelf This line makes no sense, I think because the second that ...

I think this is a good start for a poem! But you need some things to spice it up. You describe anger so plainly, why not use metaphors and imagery, ...