Emerson

Here we are, in your own Naruto world. (Really, its mine) You are joining team 7 in the ninja academy. You may not like what I put, but you're just ...

"Yeah," Jon murmurs, his throat clogged. "I'm fine." He looks at Kyle, looks like he wants something, something physical; something which would make him cry if he said it aloud. ...

Prologue I hope you don't mind me line-by-line editing? I hate how time consuming it is, but it's worth it... Wilted flowers dangling lifelessly from their climbing roots , scorched ...

Jesus, we he trying to rip Jon's heart out? we he=was he "How does that make you feel?" YES! Exactly what I wanted to see XD Had he been crying ...

Some peoples celebrated I may not be entirely right on this, but isn't "people" plural already? I'm sure you know better than I, though. I really like the chapters you ...

Dr. Haaser's voice brimmed with a deep calm and patience. Shouldn't this be either "With deep, calm patience" or ... I'm not even sure what else. The "a" kind of ...

weee It is better now ^_^ I love your portrayal of therapists, even though I'm pretty sure Dr. Haaser is just pretending to be one or...you know...something is going on. ...

What little he could feel was on his face Er. That sounds odd. "He could feel his face" or "What little he could feel was his face" or don't change ...

First I'll explain some missing stuff or stuff to be fixed then I'll point out somethings... This poem isn't in structured or rhythm form, and it doesn't rhyme. But, it ...

Beasts by Joyce Carol Oates. One thing I see happening, is we have several YAs being picked, and then here or there, adult novels. This might be a problem? Though ...

The above people have marked out spelling errors and the like. And please, capitalize? Also, punctuate: Poetry & Punctuation I am not so sure this was a poem, rather a ...

It could be scarier... She turned around slowly... to see a dark shape springing out of the bushes at her. In a horror/suspense story, you want to slow things down ...

The idea was interesting, and the rhyming actually worked. A little cliche, but it got saved by something, I'm not sure what. It could be slightly better though, maybe if ...

Heh, that's a whole lot of info on the book? Eh, I've heard of The Uglies, and it sounds interesting, but I heard it wasn't quite so. Plus I am ...

Hey everyone, Try to keep things on topic, will you? If you would like to talk about shooting people in the leg, etc. (Or...what ever you guys were talking about) ...