Emerson

... Well, for the minor notes: capitalization, typos, and probably spelling too. Read over your work before you post it, don't give us a messy thing to read, give us ...

An offense given From a time unknown Sparks anger and hatred And the will for revenge I thought that, perhaps you were cutting punctuation altogether, but there it is in ...

I liked this, and I'd really like to see it worked out better because I think I'd enjoy it, I just have some questions and a few pointers. Is this ...

I think the line breaks didn't go over so well. In the first stanza they did but in the third it felt jumpy. The now-and-then-but-not-always-rhyme-scheme bothers me... =/ This poem ...

Took a wee bit of research on my part. [Menelaus] I liked the play on the quote, "We'll always have Paris." You Bogart fan ;-) It ended too abruptly, IMO, ...

Oh dear... I just felt like I read erotica in poetry form X_X I suppose it is good but... *dies* That's like reading really graphic Rammstein lyrics, without having to ...

Very... depressing to say the least. I'm glad it didn't end up like most poems, I thought you were just praising the goodness of life or something. I think this ...

Hey, It was way too introspective for me, but I have this large distaste for nearly all exposition. It's so nasty, action pausing, and bleck. But, the problem you have ...

When Madame told her that, she blew it off. She just wasn’t confident in my ability to handle myself. What did she know? She was a city girl, lost in ...

This is cute... The rhyme scheme is very simple, stuff everyone could think up. The poem is also very simple, but there is something about it that still works. (I ...

You know, a river of time as a metaphor has only worked for me in Sidhartha . This poem was dry. I felt nothing. It just listed stuff about "the ...

You should consider taking a second look at your punctuation, and not ending every line in a common. Poetry & Punctuation . You started out with the cliché "life is ...

I don't have much to say on these. Should the be taken as a whole, or on their own? I. should be more punctuated, don't you think? The words felt ...

Okay so... I am posting these :-P I'm really glad you can read my hand writing xD You probably know it well by now... I loved it! If you can ...

Oh dear. I won't correct grammar for the sake of it... Any poem about cutting is (usually) not done well.. It's one of those topics that has been so dried ...