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In a flurry of pages And spaces blank; blank spaces seems to work a little bit here, no? Various stages Of works in ink. These are various stages of works ...

The silence of a generation, This phrasing seems a little awkward. Maybe you could try 'This is the silence of a generation' or 'The silence is of a generation' (period, ...

Okay. I really liked your language and your use of prose, but you had really slow pacing a few things that annoyed me. The tulips are red-headed traitors, bobbing, with ...

Hey Vandria. I'm here to review your piece! *Chapter One* The wind blew slightly over my round face, pushing my blond bangs into my eyes. I do have a few ...

I am not going to do a full, line by line review like I usually do, because, reading this through, I see that you are making the same mistake over ...

Sitting upon a weathered bench, We watched the sunsets fade; I think you should probably find another synonym for 'weathered'. I know what you're trying to say, but it's defintion ...

Hey. Great Poem Doyle! I did an assignment just like this about three years ago - right at the beginning of fifth grade. I like your analogies, your comparisons, your ...

Alright. Thorn here. I'll get straight to the review. tonight ! Alright. I was a little confused as to what sort of context you were using this in. If it ...

I Wanted To Say by Tiffany Alvord Hun, first I would like to start of the with the fact that you put your first and last name in this post. ...

Okay, I read through this, and It's pretty good, expect you really need to work on your grammar and sentence structure. Now, I'm not that good at grammar, so I ...

Alright, so I was looking at my old stuff from back in middle. Keep in mind this is is almost four years old, and a bit on the nonsensical side. ...

I wrote this rather than writing my U.S. History essay. :] Naughty! Haha, just kidding. Anyhow . . . My mind taunts me with rapid transitions from swirling masses of ...

In those time when you held me and told me that you loved me. I don't really understand your use of 'those time' i think you mean 'those times'. And ...

A/N ~ Sorry for the French at the end, but it was written for my French teacher. "Les papillons d'or" means "golden butterflies." Hey, No Problem. French is awesome :P ...

The mountains sing a song unknown Maybe you could rewrite this sentence as: When the mountain sings an unknown song - this would make this a little less confusing. The ...