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Hi EmmaJ! I've read the prologue to Anomaly and skimmed over the first chapter. Anyways, here's my review: I [s]hurrayed[/s] hurried down the road as fast as I could [s]with ...

I have been wanting to buy it for some time. I really enjoyed Uglies, however Pretties and Specials were just disappointing. I think that it was just because they felt ...

What's up with all the hate on the Harry Potter series? :shock: Seeing it compared to Eragon and Twilight just... sickens me. The characters and the plot are much more ...

[spoiler]The spoiler wasn't really that interesting to me - it has been obvious from other things that Stephanie Meyer has said in the past that it would be Bella and ...

Alas, now seems like a good time to resurrect that wonderful phrase: "Show, don't tell." I found this poem bland and boring, and I agree with Suzanne. The phrases just ...

A catchy little prologue. You probably could have just attached it to the first section though, it's so short. I'm also a short story writer attempting a long story. If ...

She looked through the peephole to see a distorted view. [Awkward phrase at the end, change the final word.] She backed up a bit and let [gave] herself time to ...

Not a bad start to a story. You definately have it down, it is rather info-dumpy to begin with. But I do like the strong opening, it catches the reader's ...

Okay, don't take this badly and get all mad at me in PMs again, okay? ^.^ I looked, and you have 3 of the 4 most recent posts on this ...

Okay... again, chop this up, because right now, its much too long-winded to be poetry. As the sky becomes darker, and with the rest of the world asleep- I can ...

Oh wow. I liked this. Such a neat way of weaving a story, through everyone else's perspectives. I really got into this, it was very well written. Is this based ...

Well, this isn't really a poem. I think the lines are too long for such, and it's not in any sort of poetry form. I like your 'voice' though, for ...

Copying and Pasting is much easier. If it's big, save it for the Advanced Critiques section, or split it into little sections. Ctrl + Alt + C to Copy Ctrl ...

First off - 'hopeing' is spelled 'hoping' Secondly, this is a very plain poem, with no 'showing' just telling. Nothing interesting, just blah. Did this happen? Did this happen? The ...

This should definately be a longer section. ^.^ And parts are very detailed, and then skipped to bluntness. Who is this Chris Mathews person? Why is he waiting for a ...