hmm... it was alright.
As everyone else who reviewed, it WAS kinda flat. As my reading/l.a. teacher would say, "Show, don't tell (it's boring), show, don't tell (it's boring.)" You should show more than tell. Maybe by replacing "ask" with "queried", and "come" with "arrive" or (something.)
You also need to fix "I wake up on Thursday I ask my self instant message come?"
Other than that, again, it was alright.
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