Published December 28, 2007
sitting i a dark corner...
scared
crying my eyes out...
scared
a chill running throuth my body...
scared
foot steps in the dark...
scared
a ring on my doorbell...
not scared
A friend will always be there when you are scared!
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Okay, don't take this badly and get all mad at me in PMs again, okay? ^.^
I looked, and you have 3 of the 4 most recent posts on this board. I'm glad you're enthusiastic, but why not take the time to read other people's work that is really good, and learn some tips, and work on one piece posted at a time, to really fix it up nicely and make it quality? [Which is much better than quantity.]
Right now you are just telling, and not showing us. Also, check spelling, make it professional. ^.^
- Dreami
[Reviews of my own work are always appreciated!]
overall that was really good..but i didn't really like the ending as it didn't fit in with the rest of the poem..does that make sense?