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Re: Doubled Horror- Part 1
Hey, I'm here to review as requested! I'll mostly just look for nitpicks so that you can fix them. :) Every year she avoided to go to any shopping centres, ...
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Re: Delete
Yowzah! I absolutely love this poem. It sounds of whimsical, like something from Alice in Wonderland almost. For there it is, where you decide, what your fate is to become. ...
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Re: Your own strenght
Hello and Happy Review Day! Well... it's Review Day for about an hour more. :P I'll get through the two nitpicks before I move on to praises. And I don't ...
Nov 30, 2014 -
Re: Bird-watching in the midnight sun
Hello and Happy YWS Review Day! Well... what's left of it at least. :) First of all I would like to say how much I love the format of your ...
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Re: Insensible
Hello and Happy Review Day! I'd like to point out something which will help you: For the things which only I can see, They're always around for me to see; ...
Nov 30, 2014 -
Re: Rap of the River: Humanities end
Heya and Happy Review Day! IT'S TIME FOR EXPIATION! HEAR THE SCREAMS ACROSS THE NATION! TIME FOR THE WORLDS END, ALL EARS ATTENTION MUST ATTEND! I really like this opening ...
Nov 30, 2014 -
Re: Dark
Hello and Happy Review Day!! This world is cruel and dark With twisted turns and rotten paths Congratulations on an excellent opening! It doesn't technically rhyme but when I read ...
Nov 30, 2014 -
Re: A few weirdo shorts :P
For all the stars in the Heaven's, For the moon in the sky, Stay with me, forever. You're the love of my life Okay. This should definitely be something put ...
Nov 30, 2014 -
Re: Your Eyes
Hello and Happy YWS Review Day! I've looked into your eyes about a thousand times. But I still cannot tell what you might be seeing. I want to know what's ...
Nov 30, 2014 -
Re: Years Fall Like Foes
Hello and Happy Review Day! Pretty packages of patterned paper Wow. Try saying that ten times really fast! :P I like it though, it's a fun way to open the ...
Nov 30, 2014 -
Re: Catherine
Heya, Happy Review Day!! God she was beautiful But she tasted like cigarettes The sweet rot of corruption And who could love someone that. Look at the last line. I ...
Nov 30, 2014 -
Re: Sage and The Sick-O's// Chapter Three
Hello and Happy Review Day! I don't usually review long chapters, but I'm going to so that hopefully we can clear out the Green Room! Others feel that we are ...
Nov 30, 2014 -
Re: Band Practice
Hello and Happy Review Day! Okay so I read it and it's a good script, but I feel as if it's incomplete. I'd like to know how the girls go ...
Nov 30, 2014 -
Re: Finding Destiny (Chapter 8)
Hello, it's me again. :) Okay, so you're probably wondering why I didn't review the previous chapter. It's because I found nothing wrong with it- if I'd tried to review ...
Nov 30, 2014 -
Re: Finding Destiny (Chapter 6)
One thing I notice is that between chapters they got out of the water and onto sand, include that trasition in the start of the chapter. :) "If you don't ...
Nov 30, 2014