~Heaven~
For all the stars in the Heavens,
For the moon in the sky,
Stay with me, forever.
You're the love of my life
~Remember~
Love them for an eternity,
Live in their smiles.
Know in your heart that to them your worth while,
And the thread between you will keep you connected.
So remember to love them-
Even if you hold them for a second.
~It's True~
There was a girl who fell in love,
She said that he was sent from above.
And when they asked, how she knew?
She said that she could see the Truth
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For all the stars in the Heaven's,
For the moon in the sky,
Stay with me, forever.
You're the love of my life
Okay. This should definitely be something put on a Valentine's Day card. It's corny to me, but I still think it's cute. XD One thing: Heavens doesn't need the extra punctuation.
Love them for eternity,
Even if you hold them for a second
I sort of feel like you could make this longer. I know you just wrote it because you were bored or something and probably won't get around to adding to it, but it could be amazing if it was longer. It has a lot of meaning in those two lines, but I'd still like it if it was longer.
I also suggest that you make it: for an eternity.
There was a girl who fell in love,
She said that he was sent from above.
And when they asked, how she knew?
She said that she could see, the Truth
Another Valentine's Day card poem! It's nice, but has one nitpick: In the third line you do not need that comma. I like how you capitalized the Truth.
Cool poem! Especially since you just thought of them to be random.
This is so sweet and touching! I love how it flows and has a way to attract many different readers. I especially love the technique you used here, it's unique and it worked well with what you were trying to say. Keep up the good work! I hope to read more from you!
Thank you so very much
I love this poem. I love the rhyming words too. It fits perfectly throughout the entire poem. Great job!
thank you
eternity,Intensity and craziness are the elements of love and ur poem indicates that. its a lil poem having a great message of love.people falling in love r creature of god. nd god have made the couples from heaven. Well written! stay blessed!
Hope to get a review from u: Pupz
I will be sure to get on that and thank you of the review
This just left an ache in my heart and I think I'm about to cry. Like I want that so bad! I've thought I've had it but I was definitely wrong. I'm going through a breakup right now and this was so touching. Nothing needs to be changed, your wording was perfect. I love how you capitalized "Truth" it gave it more meaning. Oh gosh I can't get over how loving this and it's like a fairy tale. I just posted about a fairy tale love. Gosh, great job. Keep up the good work!
thank you, thank you, thank you, very much
You're very very very welcome.