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As a scriptwriter tutor for three years now, i am really impressed with the way you arranged the script, it shows you are in the business of screenwriting. One thing i love about your script is that you followed the three act structure.The three-act structure is a model used in screenwriting that divides a fictional narrative into three parts, often called the Setup, the Confrontation and the Resolution.Your choice of title is awesome - it is a title every reader will want to read.your scene heading is perfectly done - you are a professional.The Scene Heading, sometimes called Slugline, tells the reader of the script where the scene takes place. Are we indoors (INT.) or outdoors (EXT.)? Next name the location: BEDROOM, LIVING ROOM, at the BASEBALL FIELD, inside a CAR? And lastly it might include the time of day - NIGHT, DAY, DUSK, DAWN... information to "set the scene" in the reader's mind.The Slugline can also include production information like CONTINUOUS ACTION, or ESTABLISHING SHOT or STOCK SHOT. Here are examples of Scene Headings:INT. BEDROOM - MORNINGEXT. LAS VEGAS STRIP - SUNSETINT. OFFICE - NIGHT - CONTINUOUS ACTIONEXT. KEY WEST MARINA - DAWN - ESTABLISHINGEXT. PASADENA - ROSE PARADE - STOCK FOOTAGEGenerally, I an so impressed with your script but i would advice you to keep writing and make your writing more interesting.Don't stop writing
Hello and Happy Review Day!Okay so I read it and it's a good script, but I feel as if it's incomplete. I'd like to know how the girls go with their band, if they get popular, if they get into a big fight and break up the group, etc. Is this just part one? Anyway, I think you should definitely keep writing it so that the story develops more.I found one little error for you to fix...Okay then, I guess we should tart off with some ideas?This is just a typo. You forgot the 'S' in start.Haha I like your Gwen character. The Beatles and Queen? She has an excellent taste in music.The way it's set out on the sheet is great, it looks just like a real script.That's me done! Good luck with acting it out. If you are acting it out, that is.
Hi there Syar! Niteowl here to review for the Black Knights this fine Review Day. Now, I'll be honest, I don't know much about scripts. However, I did see some nitpicky things right off the bat, so I'll try to point those out since this is for a contest and then I'll offer some overall thoughts. Page 1
She grabs the tea out of the microwave and sets it on acounter when she hears her phone vibrate.
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