DoubleOJell0

This is interesting... Don't call it "Garbage", I usually write my stories in a very short amount of time, sometimes with not much though (My works are mostly silly). Mistakes: ...

Your avatar makes sense with this poem, lol. Anyway, this was hard to criticize, there were no mistakes that I caught. So that means I can just give you advice. ...

Ok, here for a review! There's some stuff that I have noticed... First of all, "The blue is the color of my tears" Tears are actually colored silver and not ...

Well, as a guy who sometimes finds himself laughing, I really had to read this. Ok, first of all: "The ones that make your eyes eyes water without warning" A ...

Welcome to YWS! To be honest, I have never read an article in this website (not that I could remember). I like the way you wrote this ( if you ...

Welcome to YWS! This is nice for a first try. The only two mistakes that I noticed is that the tune/way of the poem seems to go a bit weird ...

Ok, I like it! There are some mistakes I have noticed, however: "piece by piece,here and there" Make space after a comma, just like this sentence. "You would have ripped ...

It's pretty good, just it feels just a bit too short; I recommend you to put some more words. This is really beautiful, though, and the metaphors are really impressive. ...

I'm not exactly sure what you're referring to (A short person who uncontrollably dances?) so I might do this wrong: Put commas and periods instead of just exclamation marks. And ...

Nice, It's really good for someone who's just starting. You forgot to put some commas/periods in some sentences, try focusing more. I agree with niteowl, try using all sorts of ...

Ok, this is really interesting. It's really simple, yet impressive. I like the flow of this, and the rhymes are great. I don't think this has any mistakes, though I ...

OK, I'm not sure if this is a true story(Because of the desc. and "Ellen"). This did really good at giving me a sad feeling. There are a few mistakes, ...

OK, the end made me quite interested, though it's a little wrong. Here a few things I can tell you: The last paragraph, doesn't make any sense, if he's writing ...

Ok, I'm really confused how somebody was sent to hell and he prayed to God to make him human. There were also a few other mistake/recommendations: He prayed to God ...

Yay, time for a review! I noticed that "Tres" means three. (I don't know spanish that much). But I'm quite confused what this meant... maybe you should add more information? ...