DoormanDan

Nicely written, Legacy. I enjoyed the flow of this very much. It's a good blend of both a poetic and realistic play-out of an anxiety attack, I think. You chose ...

These lyrics aren't that bad, I will say. I can feel the emotion in them, and the rap portion (I'm assuming that's what it is, so sorry if it's not) ...

As a songwriter myself, I always enjoy seeing what others bring to the metaphorical table. To start with, I love the title. Those two words really work well together, and ...

I'll say that the last few lines are fairly eerie, so five points already for a good way to end a poem. You can give yourself a little pat on ...

This is a pretty powerful piece. i always love it when poems incorporate reflections in them i some way. Overall, I feel that you did a really great job with ...

And there is most certainly nothing wrong with being peculiar (as long as ya don't go burning houses down, that is)! I could relate to almost every line (ESPECIALLY the ...

I really enjoyed reading this. Before I get to the good things about my review, I just want to point out one thing that bugs me a little bit (this ...

The flow of this piece is pitch perfect, in my opinion, and I believe the repetition you incorporated with "Once I was" succeeds in making the poem's simple structure all ...

Hmm, this is an interesting piece, probably one of the more interesting poems I have read. I have to say, I'm understand the meaning perfectly, but I don't really understand ...

Well, for somebody who has just come out of a two year long period of writer's block, you sure are a strong writer! I really enjoyed reading this poem. It's ...

Wow, I can really feel the inspiration bleeding out of this story! I can somewhat relate to how you feel, since I've just graduated from high school myself (although, I ...

Not bad, not bad at all. Your personification of the Darkness is enjoyable to read, and I enjoyed the few lines of inverted syntax you added it. Also, you did ...

This poem is pretty interesting. I really like the symbolism you have going here (now I don't think I'll ever be able to look at dirty laundry the same lol). ...

This is a pretty dark piece here! Overall, it's fairly strong, and I easily understood most of what you were trying to say. The only real thing I feel could ...

It's been a long time since I've read a short story on a writing website that I absolutely loved reading every line of. This story is strong, that's for certain. ...