DomTheDumb

Right off the bat, I must wonder if this does not work better as a poem... but as it stands, it's not bad! However, the lyricality of it almost undermines ...

First off; the atmosphere, tension, and mood of the piece is immediately palpable. That is an exceptionally difficult thing to do, and you've nailed it. Literally with the first sentence, ...

Read through it. It was thoroughly enjoyable and engaging throughout, and it kinda reminded me of Mitch Albom's writing style - which is exceptionally high praise. Maybe I'm not the ...

Hi, Lion. I hope you'll forgive me if I'm harsh - I value honesty, and I just want to help writers get better. So, let's start with the positives! First ...

Hey Creeper! I'm going to be honest with you from the start. This piece has very good bones, very, very good bones - but the writing lets it down, unfortunately. ...

Hello! Read through this and, I have to say, I have very mixed feelings. While I think you manage to convey your emotions extremely well, the writing itself misses the ...

Yo, Ryn. I'll be straight up: right now, this isn't enough to review PROPERLY. But these are just my thoughts based off what is on page: Some time ago, there ...

NOTE: I'm definitely not the target audience for story and characters, so I won't bother with those. Hey Adelaide! An interesting read, with some good bits and some bad. But, ...

Note: I saw this chapter in the Green Room, and I've now read the one preceding as well (i.e. chapter 1); therefore this is really a review of both at ...

Literary/experiential descriptors of panic attacks have become more common, to the point of banal, on the internet over the past decade or so. Most of the time, I wouldn't even ...

Hello! This has been an interesting read. Not bad, exactly - quite good in parts, in fact. That being said, I don't think I'm going to be very critical as ...

Hey Pinko! First things first - I can 100% see the vision, and I think you've made a commendable effort in trying to realise it. But, you've fallen prey to ...