Demoness

Soo.. here's my review of this piece! To begin with.. your title "If my life were a dream" it's supposed to be "was a dream" I believe :) At first ...

Wow, this was really great. Simple but Sweet! The rythm and flow worked wonderfully and so did most of your rhymes. All though, in the second stanza, the last line ...

Ohh my god.. I'm like; "Yeh, sure I'll review it.." And then I enter your portfolio.. finds it and than I'm like-.. WOAAAh. Such a massive bunch of words! But ...

Oh myy, this is so, very, very good! AMAZING, FANTASTIC, INCREDIBLE! Really, I love the strucutre, the flow the rythm... EVERYTHING You're imagery and creativity is absolutely stunning.. Impeccable re

Overall, this wasn't that bad. Good flow and structure. I did find it a bit dull though, not much imagery and a bit too short... if writing short you gotta ...

I like this, it was.. like a previous spoker said.. a bit creepy.. a good creepy though! The stanzas was a bit choppy and it felt more like a piece ...

Aaow, this was so saaaad, but still touching and really truuuly amazing to read! You must add some punctuation though because it's hard to know when it's okay to breathe... ...

Heey, this was quite good! Like the the imagery with the onion representing guilt and all, cool add! It was a bit depressing though... but that's not all bad, if ...

Haha, this was obviously original and really funny.. though a bit scarrrrry.. :P Love how you direct it to your readers, making them a part of the poem, without that ...

Wow, this is so great! Not only the rythm and flow but the entire message and the way you delivered it. So very, very good. I'm at awe! You're structure ...

Heei, I'm Demoness, here's a quick.. ehm, not review but something :P Haha, aaow how sweet. A dedication to your summer! I liked it, it was a light and simple ...

Love the story and content of this poem but I've got some nitpicking to do I'm afraid :p * CAPITALS for one... ! * Secondly... Look over you punctuation, I ...

Hellu, Je suis le demon du Ess! Néeh, Hi! I like this poem, great rythm and flow and you truly have some great imagery and descriptions going for you! To ...

Hm.. yeh I agree with previous speakers - bit cliché! Sweet poem but it lacks emotion and imagery... Try spicing it up a bit and throw in some more descirptive ...

Aaow, this is a great poem! Short but not too simple... positive thing! You've got such great imagery, I agree on the two previous speakers about the "Leaves skating" very ...