Demoness

Haha, you're so right! But I've got to write, or my mind threatens to suffocate me with it's massive mess of tangled words and thoughts and images and ideas... I ...

Hi! Dear, feared Non-Rival! Here comes a review as promised! So this is quite sad, and I feel so sorry for her children!!! I like the story though but I ...

Helli, Halloue Mister Boo! I've come to inflict my very sincere opinion on this poem! So, to begin with. I like the theme and the way you formed it into ...

Goosh, This is so great! If anyone understands the meaning of "show don't tell" it's you! This was full of such amazing imagery that I was left breathless! The previous ...

Haha, I love how you really, truly manage to express your feelings through this piece. Your anger is hard to miss so to say. When it comes to the structure ...

Okay, so.. HI! I like your idea, and this is a great topic and you manage to express the betrayal and sadness one must surely feel in a situation like ...

Gold, Infinite, everlasting. All the time, energy, and youth. Throw your gems, possesios, and memories away. - Don't you been possesions? ^^ We all have forever to regain. We will ...

Hellue, here I go as promised! Good things first today; Great, great flow! I also like the structure of this peice, very neat - I like neat! you've got some ...

Hellue, I'm Demoness and I've come to inflict my opinion on your little poem :) So.. well, I like how you're thinking and you're totally right about people turning death ...

Naay, this is so depressing.. a good depress though. But I feel so sorry for the girl.. I wanna help her, she seems so very, very sad and lonely. I ...

Nice job, it had it's faults but I think those have allready been pointed out. The flow was great, and so were your rhymes, they didn't sound at all forced ...

Haha, short, wuick, simple but cute. It was repetative.. but not in a bad way. You could off course add more imagery to spice it up but it's really not ...

Okay so great rhymes, great imagery, great story and great content.. great theme too. Overall this was great. It could be better though.. If you put some order in it. ...

Hm.. i think this piece has got potenital. It's powerful and full of imagery.. Though it's a bit much as it is.. try split the text in to stanzas and ...

Hha, aside from the br things that were quite annoying and killed my eyes when I tried to find the next line this was pretty good.. (If you wanna remove ...