Demeter

You know, this reminds me of the song "Twelve Days of Christmas". You know it? The repetition is similar to what's used in the song. The ending is great. Just ...

Okay, so here I am. Actually, you have made the perfect review yourself: "The structure is a little random, but I liked it." And that's exactly what I'm going to ...

This was a little rambling, but not bad. There were some punctuation mistakes, too. It's kind of funny that Darcie is one of her best friends but still she seems ...

I've already guessed what will happen next! But I won't tell! That's probably due to the name of chapter four in the end of this one, but still. I was ...

Hi, it's me again. And congratulations on making me read the second part. Not many people have succeeded in that. Listening closely, I could have sworn I heard a sadistic ...

Hello there. It wasn't by far bad. But there's something missing. The structure was somehow uneven, and the meaning didn't feel very strong. What if we had a song? Could ...

Hi! I agree with ChernobyllyInclined on the title thing. I was expecting some teenage bubble gum stuff, but luckily it wasn't that. I know it may be weird and unfun ...

Hi! Congratulations on the title, it's great when the title is so interesting the reader wants more immediately. So points for that. First of all, the length of the poem ...

It Started with a Bird If i was a feather capitalize the "i" That fell from a bird. replace the point with a comma I would cross the sea. delete ...

We meet again, Dustfinger :) I just reviewed your other poem. I wish you were here in front of the school to hug me in the beginning of each new ...

Sweet poem. Though I would've liked to read more, this was a little too short. You have nice ideas; why not use all of them? By expanding, this would make ...

This was fresh and fun to read, but it doesn't really remind me of a poem. The ending was great, though; reading it felt like taking a deep breath after ...

Aaah, I adored this. There's nothing I love like weirdness. (Okay, almost nothing.) You deserve a star from this. Though I don't know how much this is of a poem, ...

I read your poem "Dear Mr. Writer" before this one, and I love their satirical appearance. I hope I had written them myself :) Also, feel special when you hear ...

Hello! One thing that caught my eye was the article before "mercy". It really shouldn't be there, should it? Of course, I may be wrong, but I have a feeling ...