First I would just like to say LET GO OF THE ENTER KEY. sorry that bugs me a lot it is my poem peev. I think this is a very short poem and it could use some separate stanzas and a few more lines. but even if it does have separate stanzas I couldn't tel because of your enter key happiness. So it does have a good idea, but i would like to see more of why you won't see him again. Is it because school is ending? Is it because they're dying? Are you dying? I'm not sure. So you might want to add in a few lines as of why you're going blind. Other than that is is just fine and dandy. I like this because it also connects with me in the way that I have had to say good bye to someone I still wish was here so I guess that draws me into a more positive side of evaluation.
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