Demeter

Moi moi moi! Nyt mulla on viimein aikaa tehdä tää. Toivottavasti on ees jotain apua ;) RIPPER PROLOUGE (It's spelt "prologue" ;)) A dark form on a horse rode in ...

Hi Sarah! 1. Dresser At night I lay them out, Nice and sweet opening line, I like it! each ribbon touched by so many thumbs, I imagine myself in one, ...

Hi, Sarah! We draw thick outlines, This line is not strong enough to be an opening one. And who is "we"? Maybe plain "drawing" would do the job – though ...

Hey hi hello, niteowl! :D Two little girls [Plain words may they be, but still they made a fine beginning. were once best friends, [I'm not very into this line ...

Hi! :) Nothing is needed in return. Yes, this is grammatically correct, but it doesn't sound very good as said by Kerani. Or anyone at all, for that matter – ...

Hello there, OverEasy! I like the title of this poem. However, I felt like the poem was a little all over the place – there were little things here, others ...

Hi, Rosey! I thought I could read this now. The blood of life is in the movement, The blood of movement is in the dance. Each shift of an eye ...

Hi there, Kirsten was it? :) Let's get started, then! Nitpicks: My name was Adelaide Molyneux, my grandparents being of French descent. I was a young child at the time, ...

Hi there, EP! Here by request ;) I told myself I shouldn't read any possible, already given reviews of this story before I'd made mine. You see, I can't really ...

Hi, Chromaticed! Here by request ;) For a lonely man with his guitar, playing his tune not being disturbed. With one hand holding a cigar, I got a feeling he ...

Hi there Emma! I'm not quite sure what you wanted to say with this poem. Based on the title, I would've expected some "don't gossip, it's bad" kind of preach. ...

Hi, Jared! I'm going to start with nit-picks. “He’s coming, right?” I asked Brianne as she licked her dry lips. She rolled her eyes. How can Jen know that Brianne's ...

Hi, Sheik! Wait – I recognize that latter part! Haha. So this is how it all gets tied together... I'm thoroughly surprised by how well your pen flies, so to ...

Hello, Rosey! Here as you wished ;) At first I want to say that this was an interesting start of what I expect to be an interesting story. It's very ...

Come on, people, Lord of the Flies is classic! I liked it :) Twilight was uninteresting. It was actually quite boring, so I read only the first one. And Lord ...