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Hi there mysterygirl, This piece was a bit disappointing. It was hard to read because of little grammatical erros like saying "her" instad of "she". For example that sentence would ...

Hi Deniisia, This was a pretty good preview. You have a nice theme going on here and it looks like it can be turned into a really good horror story. ...

Hey there, Mossyra, I really liked this poem. You used rhyming really well and there was a nice rhythm to it. I liked tge very detailed and vivid description of ...

Hi Duke, I really liked this poem. I think it had a great meaning, and you managed to bring it across exceedingly well. I like your use of symbolism. Oranges, ...

Hi Pletta, I seemed to understand this poem, but at the same time I didn't. And in the end it made me feel sad and lost, a bit ashamed of ...

Hey BrokenSkye, I would like to say this is a very dramatic poem. I'm sure a lot of people could relate to this situation. I like how you describe her ...

Hi ongoeslife I think this a beautiful piece of descriptive poetry. You capture the true beauty of a beach beautifully. I like your choice of words, as if they were ...

Hey there PassionateTeen, Hmm... I'm not sure whether I like this or not. It leaves much to be esired. Firstly, you write like you're talking to the reader instead of ...

Hey there, I think this was a good beginning to story. I loved the transition between the two characters. It clearly displayed how you can write well in many different ...

Back again, GoonerGirl, I think this was a good continum. I liked it. I think you did better this time on not over-rushing the information; although there was still quite ...

Hey there GoonerGirl, I really liked this opening prologue. I think you did a good job of giving the characters personality and letting the reader "meet" them in a sense. ...

Hey there Pumpkincat, I liked the meaning behind this poem. I can tell you really believe what you're writing, and that there is a deep meaning. And it's easy to ...

Hey there Darcie, Well, this was certainly a very dark poem. I gathered that the italics were the bad part of the speakers mind that got the speaker to do ...

Back again! Another very nice story. I loved the description. It was written beautifully as if you had chosen each word out carefully. I loved the last paragraph because it ...

Hey Dreamy :) "It started when I stopped". A beuatiful openin line that immediately hooks the reader. It could mean anything and already I'm dragged in and wanting to know ...