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Re: Poem Of Blue
Hi Sree! I have fifteen minutes so going to do a quick review and will probably get back to the other ones later. I'll run though grammar and/or spelling first: ...
Jun 2, 2018 -
Re: Psychic chapter nine
Hi AnimalQueen! Danni here for a review! OK, let's do grammar and/or spelling first. I will run through the mistakes I found here: It's not you're your fault." Most of ...
Jun 2, 2018 -
Re: Crystal Clear Chapter 2
Heyo! I couldn't find this because it was in the folder 'Empty Drafts (DONT CLICK)'? OMG Meissa reminds me so much of me. I have the same opinions as her ...
Jun 1, 2018 -
Re: Crystal Clear Chapter 1 (again)
Hi! Danni here for a review! OK, grammar: g G ooooooo Dingos!" stepping off of the black pad General nitpicks: As @Mea says, the paragraph where you describe the cheerleaders ...
Jun 1, 2018 -
Re: The Shadow Starkers Poem
Hi MoonFlower! Danni here for a review! OK, I am going to try a new way of reviewing and quote the work here with wrong things in strikethrough , my ...
May 17, 2018 -
Re: Deleted
Hi MoonFlower! Danni here for a review! I really like this. I love the suspense you leave at the end and also the relationship between Lightning and Diamond. I think ...
May 13, 2018 -
Re: *deleted*
Hey! Danni here for a review! OK, I am going to re-write the story with errors in strikethrough , my changes in bold and my comments in italics . Keep ...
May 11, 2018 -
Re: Bluey The Super Blue Dog
Hi! Danni here for a review! First off, did you do the artwork yourself? I really like it! OK, grammar: Bluey saw a girl looking up at a tree. Bluey ...
May 11, 2018 -
Re: Psychic chapter eight
Hey AnimalQueen! Danni here for a review! Apologies for the shortness, I have about thirty seconds to write this. First off, you're getting a lot better with your paragraphs! I ...
May 8, 2018 -
Re: Bullied
Hey Liz! Danni here for a review! I'm going to try something different and review like this, with my changes in bold , wrong things in strikethrough and my comments ...
Apr 21, 2018 -
Re: Psychic chapter seven
Hey AnimalQueen! Danni here for a review! First off, this is saved in your 'General' folder instead of your 'Horror' folder? hall ways Hallways is one word. I love the ...
Apr 14, 2018 -
Re: To Hera, From a Fellow Sufferer
Hey AnneTaylor! Danni here for a review! OK, grammar: Did your goddesse's mind and your women's heart should actually be Did your goddess's mind and your woman's heart as in ...
Apr 14, 2018 -
Re: Beautiful Pain Chapter 2.
Hey! Danni here for a review! @scarlettvee has covered all my grammar nitpicks, but you could improve The only her. by making it into The only her for me. That ...
Apr 14, 2018 -
Re: Beautiful Pain Chapter 1.
Hi Liz! Danni here for a review! This was quite short, so maybe add some more things. Also, you say Hadley has to get the album before everyone else, but ...
Apr 8, 2018 -
Re: Psychic chapter six
Yay, time for chapter six! Danni here to review it! OK, nitpicks: Why voice was hoarse Change 'Why' to 'my'. May be Maybe is all one word. a reliefdence I'm ...
Apr 2, 2018