Psychic chapter eight

by AnimalQueen

Published May 6, 2018

12+

In Horror

Charlotte's POV

I was scared.

Sitting there, in my math class, there were so many living and yet so many dead. I saw so many ghosts.

There was Stella, with her red hair partially covered by even redder blood. Why wouldn't she leave me alone? She just stood there, weeping silently.

And behind me, there was a man who appeared to be deranged. He kept rolling back into his head, and he was singing unintelligibly and muttering to himself. It terrified me.

An elderly woman just wandered around the classroom, looking lost. I wished I could just block them out somehow!

 "Char? Are you okay?" I heard David say.

"I have a headache." I lied.

 "Do you want me to take you to the nurse?"

 "No, I'll be okay."

 "Are you sure?" David asked.

 " Yeah. "

 "Okay then." He said.

We sat in silence for a moment.

 "So, do you like math?"

 "It's okay, I guess. I'm pretty good at it." I told him.

 "Wish I was." David replied.

 "I can't spell, if it makes you feel any better."

 "Thanks." David's green eyes were intent on mine. God, how could eyes be so green?! I just couldn't look away from them.

 "You're welcome." I said. "So, has anything interesting happened lately?"

 "Yes, actually." He said. " I'm trying out for the soccer team today! "

 "Cool" I said. "Maybe I'll come and watch you."

 David beamed. "That would be awesome! Do you play any sports?"

 I shook my head. "No, but it there was  a swim team, I might. I love to swim."

 "So does my sister." David said. " Hey, the teacher still isn't here! Is she ever on time?

 "Never!" I said with a laugh. " that's why math is my favorite class! "

David chuckled.

 "So, do you have any brothers or sisters?"

 "Nah, I'm an only child." I was trying to play it cool, but I could still see the ghosts out of the corner of my eye.

 "Lucky." David said. " I love my sister, but she does crazy and uncalled for things sometimes. "

 "Like what?" I asked. I was trying to pay attention to him, but Stella was standing next to me, bawling her head off.

 "Like the time she wrote a twenty-seven page burn book about me. Might I add this was two years ago, when she was eight years old. It wasn't very good, but the fact that she went to all the trouble to write was insult enough." 

I made a sound that I hoped resembled a laugh.

 David looked concerned.

"Oh, there's a kid I babysit for who screamed at the top of her lungs for the neighbors to shut their dog up." I hoped a story would make him stop looking at me like that. I didn't need more people staring at me!

David burst into wild fits of laughter at my recollection.

Just then, the teacher walked in. We, and everyone else quieted down, but only a little. She wrote some problems in the board, instructed us to do them, and sat down with a mug of coffee and 'The Washington Post' newspaper.

I loved this class.

Math distracts me from reality. It's easier to tune out the ghosts if my brain is working hard. Unfortunately, getting so into it means I finish fast. I used to ask the teacher for harder problems, but I stopped when kids started beating me up over it.

As usual, I finished before anyone else. And as usual, Stella was there, staring up at me. "Breathe." I told myself mentally. "Remember: Fake it till you make it."

 David was looking at me again. I felt like an insect under a sheet of glass. But I wasn't going to say anything. Not when he actually seemed to like me.

My day just got worse and worse. I found notes in my locker, but I threw them out. I never read mean notes, because I already have enough suffering in my life.

Then, at lunch, I realized I forgot to bring food and didn't have any money with me. My school doesn't allow us to pay another time, only right away. My friends shared their lunch with me, but I wouldn't let them give me too much. It made me feel guilty even though I knew Cassie and John were just trying to help. No one except them talked to me since I didn't see David, and I really didn't feel like talking. I was exhausted and I wanted to go home.

I didn't want to deal with ghosts, or living people, or schoolwork. 

I was headed to my last class of the day when it happened. Stella had been following me on and off the whole day. Looking at her was starting to make me nauseous. I didn't go to the nurse, though, because I was fairly sure I wasn't actually sick. She wouldn't understand.

So, I was getting my things from my locker while trying to avoid looking at her, when I heard David talking to me.

 "Hey, Charlotte."

 I turned to looked at him, and in doing so, looked at Stella as well. That last thing was all it took to push me over the edge. My mind and body just couldn't take it anymore.

I threw up all over my crush.

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Danni88
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Danni88 wrote a review Review · May 8, 2018

Hey AnimalQueen! Danni here for a review! Apologies for the shortness, I have about thirty seconds to write this.

First off, you're getting a lot better with your paragraphs!

I think we need to know a bit more here. You don't really include much description, it's mainly characters talking.

Haha, I love the last sentence! Adds both suspense and humour. Will David get mad at her? Will he not care? What will he do?

Another great instalment of this! Keep up the great work!

Danni x

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Eve wrote a review Review · May 6, 2018

I like the dramatic take this plot is taking. However, character development is KEY to attract readers. It felt just as if they weren't thought out very well. What are their personalities? What do they do in their spare time? Are they timid? Brave? Dramatic? I had this problem for a long time as well, don't worry, there is a cure.
Get a journal for your story and nothing else. Draw what you want your characters to look like, one character gets one page to themselves. Then, map out the character traits; favorite color, hairstyle, accents, anything and everything that makes the character different than the rest.
Then, make a few scenarios and record what the characters would do in that situation, would they run? would they stand their ground? from these scenarios, you can judge the character and weed out their personality from these scenarios. Once the characters are mapped out, you can decide which traits you want to change throughout the story.
For instance, one character could be cold-hearted in the begginning, but slowely (not suddenly) becomes on of the most selfless an loving people.
Also I've read your stories before, there are other characters, you need to make sure they're not forgotten. Make chapters last long than just for a conversation.
Again, LOVE the plot. Just get to know your characters better. :)



Uh, Lisa, the whole reason we have elected officials is so we don't have to think all the time. Just like that rainforest scare a few years back: our officials saw there was a problem and they fixed it, didn't they?
— Homer Simpson