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Re: Posies
I really like this! I HATE teachers who think they know everything and force their opinions and style of writing upon their students. I had one of those last I ...
Jun 26, 2011 -
Re: Kidnapping
I enjoyed this! I liked your metaphor for your memory as a kidnapper, it's an extremely good and creative example for how your past can overpower your present sense and ...
Jun 26, 2011 -
Re: --
Wow I really like this! You made such a simple subject so deep and interesting. I love the description you used to convey her emotions in her situation. My favorite ...
Jun 26, 2011 -
Re: Vision And Veracity
Very interesting, never would have thought of the idea of making a fanfiction for an Oompa Loompa in Willy Wonka's chocolate factory! I'm a little confused with the structure, is ...
Jun 26, 2011 -
Re: Shimmer
This is very interesting! I really enjoyed the ending that pulled in with the title and kind of brought together the whole piece. The only small things I have to ...
Jun 26, 2011 -
Re: Found Poetry: The Catcher in the Rye
Huh, interesting idea! Catcher in the Rye...awesome book:) I can tell those phrases are from it. Maybe I'll try this sometime for fun :) Keep writing!
Jun 26, 2011 -
Re: Romance...
Hello! I'll begin with some comments about the first piece. I quite like it, especially since you didn't have anyone in particular, though you could kind of tell it was ...
Jun 26, 2011 -
Re: Serving For You
You have a very powerful message in this piece, which I admire. I feel like you could rearrange some of these lines to create a more powerful poetic piece. Maybe ...
Jun 26, 2011 -
Re: Sin
I like this! Your rhythm is smooth for the majority of the piece, and I like how you got inspired in church, it really shows! I don't have too much ...
Jun 26, 2011 -
Re: The world
Wow again, I really like this. You have beautiful talent at conveying your message through poetry. I really like your description in this one, with the blood and the landscape/tears. ...
Jun 25, 2011 -
Re: Pieces
Wow I really really like this poem. I can't really find anything to seriously critique, so I'm just going to say that I thoroughly enjoyed your message and your emotions. ...
Jun 25, 2011 -
Re: I wish
I really like this! I can personally relate to your topic. It's very real and perfect to convey in a poem. I like your structure and description, I just have ...
Jun 25, 2011 -
Re: Here Is My Message
This is powerful, and your emotions definitely come across as strong. I don't know if I would necessarily call this poetry though. It does have a structure and purpose, but ...
Jun 25, 2011 -
Re: the sparkly vampire and chosen wizard tales
Hi! Since everyone already commented about the punctuation and grammar and all that lovely business, I'm just here to compliment you on your hilarity and comic genius :) Every once ...
Jun 22, 2011 -
Re: Voiceless
Huh this is very interesting! I like how it's different from other stories I've read. The fact that the doctor dies leaves plenty of mystery to what the baby did ...
Jun 10, 2011
