Christina

Hello, This is a good piece of writing and I think you could write some more and develop the characters if you wanted to. It is a bit confusing how ...

Hello, This is a good start. I feel like you have described this character well. It might be a good idea to look back over your work. I noticed there ...

Hello, This is a good story. I enjoyed reading it. There are a few spelling mistakes. 'Erie' should be spelt 'eerie'. 'Mirical' should be spelt 'miracle'. 'Terriblly' should be spelt ...

Hello, Well done for writing this. It's good. I think you need to check you have used capital letters in the right places. Names always have capital letters. Also, I ...

Hello, This is a good piece of writing. To improve you could break up your writing in to paragraphs so it is neater and easier to read. Also, you don't ...

Hello, This is a great start to your story. "Though she could not do so, as she was the one who created the danger and the great risk to many ...

Hello, I enjoyed reading this. It was very different from what I was expecting. I'm not sure the word 'twilight' is the best word to use to describe Alice's hair. ...

Hello, This is a great writing attempt. I like the concept of the story. It all seems to go a bit fast though. Maybe you could try to talk a ...

Hello, This is a great story. It was very interesting. However, it does seem very fast paced. Maybe you could spend more time on it and make it longer. It ...

Hello, I loved reading this. It's really interesting to hear the character's thoughts. You have also done really well describing everything. The only thing I can think of to say ...

Hello, This was enjoyable to read. It was a bit confusing as I didn't realize you were writing from a horse's point of view until the last few paragraphs. Maybe ...

Hello. I enjoyed reading this. As Timmyjake says, 'Is worth it' should be 'It's worth it'. Also you wrote 'Then ten minute'. I think you meant 'Then the minute', am ...

Hello. I really enjoyed reading this. I love how it's all about a special book and a special girl. I think it's really cool and so romantic. You mention a ...

Hello. I like this story. You have done really well describing everything. I also like the setting of the story. I think there is a bit of punctuation missing. E.g ...

Hello, I think this is a great piece of writing. I like the bit about the 'fun mop'. That is a great idea. However, there are a few spelling mistakes ...