ChimeraMania

'There were to many drunk guys doing there best to get laid, and drunk girls who were willing to oblige them' 'Thats were too many drunk guys try their best ...

Oh my gosh love the end and how your leaving me in suspense. I so wanna know what happens next, but first. I don't understand how much time passed from ...

This is a really good book, and it looks like its your first one. I know how it feels to write a first book then have someone review it, but ...

First you need a space in 'namewas' 'name was'. 'of town'. 'would sneak' 'Her feeling grew stronger each day Vanessa even wanted to skip college and run away with him,' ...

Oh my gosh...Freakette...this story is so good. I didn't see a flaw in it. I hope you write a chapter to it. Its so lovely and romantic. You were on ...

Oh my gosh I smell a good book coming out of this one. The language is okay, it just show that she was mad because of what Jerry said. I ...

First you don't need 'delighted in it' just 'delighted it' not 'squawked of it ' just 'squawked if it so pleased him' 'were likely an' not 'were likely of an' ...

You don't need the and after bones in the beginning just put it like 'bones. With this fact' The first paragraph is like really to long you can separate it ...

I already told you that is was good, but I still agree with davidechoe13. Some parts you get lost, but once you keep reading you'll understand, but you just have ...

Oh my gosh this is so good. I like your poem so much. Everything is so sad almost makes me want to cry. Almost. There's nothing wrong with our poem. ...

The part about kissing doesn't really need to be in there. I understand that the person doing to bulling is a girl because you said "the word escaping through glossy ...

You do need a period after me in the second like. And I hope you mean watched instead of washed. You don't really need the 'had settle' part it would ...

I really like the beginning were you went from peaceful fields and times to industry. It is pretty rough like there really isn't any main reasons why you wrote it. ...

Omg totas funny. I agree with VassternickDrauka, where are they. It seemed like they were on stage, but then it also kind of seemed like they were backstage. Now that ...

I've never really written poetry before and if I have yours was way better. I too agree with GrapeNerd the 'dragged through mud' part, but i see that you tried ...