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Wow! That was amazing. I like the kind of formal sense it had to it. The only thing is the last line. Shouldn't it have been "Daytime has appeared?"

I read it but it sorta felt like it was missing something...you really should post the rest!

To be honest, this did nothing for me . It just seemed to lack any sort of emotion, or profoundness. It looks like you tried too hard to make a ...

I loved this poem. It was very creative and I love the was quite a bit of it but you didn't overdo it. I'm not sure if I grasped the ...

Thanks so much everyone...I'm glad people are starting to like my poems again. I guess I just went through an awkward stage at one point. I don't have Microsoft Word ...

It has like a semi-upbeat sound to it. Not all the way up there but not all the way down there. If you've ever heard Backstreet Boy's Incomplete or Mr. ...

I made a few changes. I didn't get the poem myself, actually...hopefully the line I added with help everyone understand it--including me.

Just to be was a bit boring because I felt so bloody disconnected. However, I will try to see pass that. I agree with River Girl, the imagery is very ...

It was a very lovely poem. I especially loved the last line though it could use a little work to be even more powerful. This poem could also use a ...

I agree with Liz (TBR). It was very beautiful and if I had a boyfriend I would wish I could write things like this about him, too. I loved how ...

I kinda figured that was where you were coming from but with that subject, you could make this a very powerful poem. I totally understand writing poems on something that ...

Very quick and clean but it seems a little incomplete. Perhaps you should build off of this.

I'm trying to get away from the sympathy vote but it's virtually impossible so I'll just take the easy way out and agree with the others.

Wow. CL, this song is so beautiful! Do you have the music for it? If so, I would love to hear it. And you are very much so a lyricist.

Well, I would do that, but the way I have the music set up, it fills in the empty spaces. I'll post it on here one day with me singing ...