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Well, I read your song and it was amazing. I don't really like this one as much because it's depressing, cliche, and the whole shebang. I really liked your song ...

Lol. I really liked this, even though I'm not sure what was the chorus, verse, bridge, etc. Also, the title was er...yyyeah. However, I don't think there needs to be ...

I don't know anything else to say other than WOW. That was amazing.

*AsN: This was finished at 2am by Morgan and I. It's a duet, of sorts. It was 3am for me I think.

hm...someone moved it already! lol, i was going to reques that.

Well, there was a strong amount on inconsistency since some of it rhymed and some of it didn't. I also didn't really understand the point/subject/concept. Meh...maybe it's just me.

Well, I didn't really feel a connection between most the lines, they just seemed like a combination of phrases.

Wow...this was really good. A lot of times when reading lyrics, they can be very redundant, but these weren't at all. It was fun to read. I liked it. :Two ...

I don't think I've ever read anything like this before. It's very different--and i loved it! I just wish I could write like this.

Oh, and I do have a suggestion...you should probably change the seems to me, a little out of place.

Um, okay. I guess I get it now.

"I," "Me," and "My" seemed to be used a little bit too much. Maybe you should change it to a third person...I was overwhelmed by the huge amount of times ...

this poem seemed to be more like a story instead of a poem. i think it would have made a much better story than poem...

Thanks for the comments guys--very true. However, I just read this poem over...and I don't think I could ever change anything about it because it's the way I feel about ...

I was in a terribly bad mood when I posted that--sorry if it came across as being harsh. :cry: Sorry...but I guess it was an okay poem.