Published January 29, 2005
VERSE 1
Why do you always think the worst of me,
am i really that bad,
or do you just really hate me,
cuz i no i hate me.
im not worthy enough for you,
and this place.
i should just leave,
find somewhere that wants me,
but where???
CHORUS
I wish this would all go by,
and leave me alone,
so i can live in peace,
with out crying every night
and wondering if things will ever change.
VERSE 2
i remember when you used to tell me,
that you loved me,
that you cared and hoped i'd do well.
But now you just don't care,
you wouldn't even noitice it i died,
which is what i should do,
Just die.
CHORUS
I wish this would all go by,
and leave me alone,
so i can live in peace,
with out crying every night
and wondering if things will ever change.
VERSE 3
As i look at you one last time,
i mumble I LOVE YOU!!
but you dont hear me,
then i drift away,
into my own place.
You shed one tear and move on,
cuz I'm not worth your tears.
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It's really awesome, but it could use some grammar.
I think this would be better as:
"i'm not worthy of you
i should just leave this place
find somewhere that wants me,
but where???"
I thonk it flows better, but ultimately it's up to you.
may be u should check ur spellings...they are mistaken especially in verse 2.
its good work any way. i like it.
Yes I also liked the last verse alot. The first one could use some working on and so could the grammar. But you sum it all up very good.
If you used proper grammar, it would be a lot more powerful. I agree, I like the last verse.
Nice. I love the last verse especially.
I don't know anything else to say other than WOW. That was amazing.