Why did you delete it? I came back, when it wasn't so late to edit it, and it's gone!
Why did you delete it? I came back, when it wasn't so late to edit it, and it's gone!
Thank you. 'Cries' is a good suggestion. And actually it is with my life. Since the poem is referring to actual physical cuts I'm saying that each cut is 'stained' with a part of my life. Make sense?
But rather see the scars,
For they're stained with my life.
Hey! I read that in your signature earlier! It seemed ... deep it could relate to it, although it's probably not for the same reason that inspired it.
It seems a little forced in the middle, but that's the bit you took out for you sig. isn't it? Overall I liked it, I'm not the best poetry editor, stories are more my field, so I'll come back and try to edit it proply when it's not so late here.
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