Hello!
VioletFantasy here to review this cool little poem you wrote. I really enjoyed it! I think we all wonder at some point in our lives what it would be like if we didn’t behave and acted rude all of the time. This poem really grasps that concept. I feel like it would be a lot easier to forget about all of the niceties and just say whatever we want. But alas, we must have manners.
“ I dream of becoming evil
Dangerous
A hazard to insects
Small animals
And children”
This is definitely my favorite part of the poem. It almost made me laugh out loud(which makes me sound horrible)! The ultimate form of evil is being a danger to children, due to their associations with innocence and hope. You worded this perfectly!
The rest of the poem was amazing as well as slightly eerie. You did a wonderful job of using imagery to describe what evilness is like, especially in this line: “ A fortress of botanical nastiness”. I imagine everything that is bad in the world all in that fortress.
Overall, this was an awesome poem. I couldn’t find any grammar or spelling mistakes in it, so congrats on that! I hope that I will get to read more of your work!!
Points: 1305
Reviews: 53
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