Butterfinger

Wow! I love this! It feels like it's looped from beginning to end and connects so solidly! Love it!

I'm not the best critique on lyrics, mostly because I can better review when listening to it. It'd be great if you'd like to post a recording! PM me when ...

I like this. It would be cool to hear it, it sounds like the kind of song I sometimes get stuck in my head. Great Job!

I really love this because even when you wonder where the inspiration is, it's still there!

I have to admit I didn't immediately click on this took me a good half hour to give in to my curiosity and it was very good! Great wording! Keep ...

I love this! You can add to it or you can leave it like this because it holds a striking image with it's two vivid stanzas. This piece paints a ...

You did a fantastic job of painting a picture that was both humorous and kind of creepy! There was an edge to it that drew me in and made me ...

I loved the rhyme setup but it felt a little forced at the end because you added to the length, but that's just my thoughts. Overall, well done!

I could imagine being on that roof top and I loved how you declared that we shouldn't live like clouds, just going along with every whim of the world, because ...

You did a wonderful job with this! Love how you made it rhyme, but at times it felt like too many words just for the rhyme. There's nothing wrong with ...

Ahahahahahah! I absolutely love this poem! I have to ask, where did you get your inspiration from???!! Brilliantly wrote and the overall feel of it was enticing! Great job fantabulously ...

There's so much in just three stanzas and the rhyming made it flow all the better. The feelings are so strong that I can relate to the person. Wonderful! Keep ...

I appreciate your Critique Incognito! I can definitely see your point. I've always thought of poetry as a way to get away from the strict English teacher way of writing ...

I love this poem and the way you rhymed the lines and made the whole thing flow! Wonderful! Keep writing!

Hahaha! I love your evil laugh at the beginning! Flavor??? The best is Cheese cake with crushed up butterfingers in it! yummy! Hmmm..... What a life A real fat joy ...