Suddenly, I’ve lost myself,
Everything I knew is wrong,
I feel like I’m falling,
And clarity is what I long.
My friends go and stab my back,
Comfort moves away,
And when people ask how I am,
I’m not quite sure what to say.
I am lost,
And confused wouldn’t be a lie,
But everyone is as lost as me
And all I can do is try.
Points:
Time spent:
Canary word: Present
Possible AI signals:
Original Text:
Are you sure you want to delete this comment? This cannot be undone.
Mark this comment as a review? Points will be awarded to the poster.
Your comment was posted, but it wasn’t long enough to count as a review. Reviews need about four complete sentences (at least 250 characters). Try writing another review that explains your thoughts in more detail — the author will appreciate it, and you’ll earn points for it.
125,018 Literary Works • 672,855 Reviews
This is really good, not much to say apart from this little bit;
I'm not sure about this line, the rest of the poem is a bit more subtle and this is more 'in your face'
Hope this was helpful
There's so much in just three stanzas and the rhyming made it flow all the better. The feelings are so strong that I can relate to the person. Wonderful! Keep writing!