Spikes
Hot
Sharp
Sinking, low, low, lower
Falling, faster, faster, faster
Pressed
Pressed
Determined, pressed, depressed,
Voices
Sharp
Needles “Hi!”
Chaos, swirling
Shouting, swirls
Clear
Clear
Glasses think loud!
Perfect
Clear, blinding sense
Pain
White
Hot
Who’s fault?
My fault?
No, not my fault
Not all my fault
“Don’t you want to eat something?”
“Don’t you want to share the guilt?”
Big, blue, oceans
Wider
Squint
Brown caterpillars
Bend
Arch, stretch
Hands
Shoulder
Wanting
Rising
Breathing
Seeing
Determined
Release
Here I am
I’m here
I
“What did you say?”
Talons
Painted, pink
Cutting shoulders “ow”
Pressing
Worried “what?”
Shoulders
Pressing down, determined,
No more
Pressed
Depressed.
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Ahahahahahah! I absolutely love this poem! I have to ask, where did you get your inspiration from???!! Brilliantly wrote and the overall feel of it was enticing! Great job fantabulously done!
The way you wrote it shows in a great way the thoughts going through the person's mind
At first, to be honest, I didn't get it. But then I kept reading. Although I normally don't like scattered works, this one worked very well. Schizophrenia changes a person's mind. I don't have it, but from what I've read and seen on TV, I think that how you presented the thought processes were very accurate. I am wondering why you choose schizophrenia out of the diseases tghat affect the mind this way. Do you or someone you are close with have it or are you just fascinated by the mind? I liked how some thing were in quotations to show the sound of voices, like the voices people with schizophrenia hear. I like your writing style. Keep up the good work!
Wow.
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I love this.
Real heartfelt stuff
Absolutely loved the abstract nature of it! Well done, very different style. Keep up the fantastic writing!