This is a poem I wrote like 10 minutes ago on a whim. I have all these points and nothing to post, so here it goes.....
Feel free to rip this apart. 
Let me take your hands
And free you from all demands
Let me take your lips
And seal our love with a beautiful kiss
Cloak me with your endless love
In the dead of night with the stars above
Let me see inside your soul
I want to hug until we grow old
Let this moment never be silenced
Let us shout out our love in defiance
Make my eyes only see you
And in the end, let it only be us two
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Wow, this was great! I loved the ideas you put into it, and I thought that it was just the right length; not too long or short. Maybe a little more punctuation, and it's perfect!
My only nit-pick is the grammar. You have one comma. You need more!!! Other than that this poem is really awesome!!! I love it
Keep writing,
Alzora
You did a wonderful job with this! Love how you made it rhyme, but at times it felt like too many words just for the rhyme. There's nothing wrong with that! Beautiful!
As if you wrote this in ten minutes, it's awsome!!
Just a few little tweaks...
"Let me take your hands
And free you from all demands
Let me take your lips
And seal our love with a beautiful kiss"
This stanza is SO good!!
One of the best.
"Cloak me with your endless love
In the dead of night with the stars above
Let me see inside your soul
I want to hug until we grow old"
The last line could be made a bit, not saying it's bad, just could be better.
That's all.
"Let this moment never be silenced
Let us shout out our love in defiance
Make my eyes only see you
And in the end, let it only be us two"
You could change it to this:
"Let this moment never be silenced
Let us shout our love in defiance
Make my eyes see only you
And in the end, let it just be us two"
Saying "only" that close together is a bit distracting.
Anyway, good poem, and sorry if i mucked it up.
I am SweetMoments and I am going to reveiw your work.
Overall:
This is a very nice poem only a couple of things you could improve on.
-Sweet♥