Butterfinger

Wait a minute, you're calling me immature? Wow, that right there is immature. You don't even know me. I was just giving my opinion and you start calling names. You're ...

Hiya!!! I really enjoyed the flow to this poem, it felt like lyrics to me, almost a sort of rap. As a reader, I was very engaged from the time ...

Hiya!!! I love this one! Here's my comments! Rage is a sickness full of brutal anger and dark desires. Attiude is a heartless emotion Interesting connection...makes me think! vowed to ...

This is the classic breakup story with a broken heart and you put a nice rhythm to it. Nice word choice, it flowed smoothly. As a reader, I don't feel ...

Hey there! Welcome to YWS!! Great to read your writing! I do think this is more of narrative poetry and I absolutely love the story line! Depressing, but beautiful in ...

Wow, this is very long and it doesn't read very smoothly. It's kind of like your rambling, but I get the gist. Your format urks me because it just adds ...

What's inside is kept hidden, safe, *Right here would be a good place to add something like: "safe, like the blood in my veins" just an example, but show us ...

Wow, this has simple yet very touching wording. I can feel the emotion because of the simplicity that you put directly onto paper. The only suggestion I would make, would ...

I'm hiding in the closet with an angel in my pocket; I shut the door and locked it. Just a feeling, but I can't stop it. I'm wondering what feeling ...

Like most everyone has said, these are similar feelings that almost everyone has had. But we all deal with them differently and the way you express them in words is ...

I don’t know how to say this, my words are taffy stuck. Interesting Description! But every touch, and every breath is far too much to Bear with me, hold my ...

Wow Ty, this really is a beautiful and creative piece of writing. As I'm reading all the comments, there's so many words of my own I'm trying to get out. ...

As I'm typing, I don't really know what to say. I love your writing, it amazes me the passion you have. Your way with words moved me to tears as ...

Though I'm not quite sure of the meaning of this poem, I applaud it because of it originality, which detention can sure provoke :). Beautiful wording, it kept a perfect ...

Hello there! This is a great example of a poem that has a great story line and rhyming to it that it flows nicely and keeps the readers interest. I ...