BookWolf

Wow... this is a brilliant, deep, passionate poem, if I can call it that. This is truly amazing and I find myself locked in almost immediately. You are a great ...

Aw, very touching story. :D But on to the corrections. When you said 'I'd whisper into you ears, I miss you.' That should be on the same line and look ...

Okay, interesting story, just a few things I must point out. There's a saying that zombies are just trapped in their rotten body ,but their mind (The comma goes just ...

That was extremely sweet and awesome! :D You have great description and the words you use creates smooth pictures in my mind. Just a couple of things. asleep or feigning ...

Pretty good writing and very interesting, just a few things. the girl that, a little later, was going to become his wife gave him a bit of happiness, without any ...

Pretty well written, just a few things. I was disappointedat the absence of color I think you meant 'I was disappointed at the absence of color". You just forgot the ...

Very good writing and I loved the way you described the kiss. About how easily it turned into something passionate. Not that I can speak from experience... But, anyway, this ...

This is a perfect poem about love. Just a couple mistakes. 'It's there once but then gone again and I can imagine your fingers in mine.' This is how it ...

This is very hilarious! :D I read the whole and found myself at least smiling the whole time. Just a couple of things though. Theeyyy legit believe she'll do that ...

Skyrim! I absolutely love Skyrim. Right when you said Dragonborn I knew what was going on. You are obviously a skilled writer and I enjoyed the smoothness of the words ...

Alright, finally checked out your second chapter and I have to say that its even more captivating than the last one. :) The whole interaction at the end made me ...

Nicely written and quite entertaining. I just have to say that I don't think this should have been rated E. :D Maybe 12+ or something like that. This type is ...

Okay, this was a boss poem! I loved it! :D The rhyming was perfect. Your very first sentence pulled and locked me in. I found that this poem describes life ...

Wow, great description and I found myself sucked in immediately. But there's something I want to point out. '"So you likes to play rough do you, filthy wench?"' Why did ...

This is a very sad story. :( Pretty well written, but very sad. But before I continue I would like to welcome you to YWS! :D I hope you have ...