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Re: My Hidden Life
I agree with butterfliekisses, the beginning was really interesting, but you lost me as it went on. The descriptions were good and the stanzas were good, but it just seemed ...
Nov 7, 2013 -
Re: Randomly written short poems
Hi! I LOVE these short poems! They sound like they are real, professional poems that look like you find in a book! They are great ideas, but I wish you ...
Nov 7, 2013 -
Re: The Life Unknown {Updated} {Chapter #1}
Hi! I really like this story and your idea, but I agree with Holysocks. You have a lot of grammar and formatting mistakes. But, besides that, I like your use ...
Nov 7, 2013 -
Re: Chapter 1
While I do think your story is a good one and the storyline so far is pretty good, I do have some things to point out. One, this section doesn't ...
Nov 7, 2013 -
Re: Went for a walk and never came back.
Wow. That's the only word I have, wow. This is extremely good! I love the description, the plot, everything! My skin actually crawled when you said: He moves in a ...
Apr 26, 2013 -
Re: Prom
Hey there, ThothMagic! I really liked your story! It had a "super-duper" plot! I really liked the characters, (except most of the Scene Queens and Josh, of course.) But there ...
Apr 26, 2013 -
Re: "The way"
I agree with the other people who commented on this. It is a good idea, but it definitely needs an adjustment. You stanzas/verses, actual punctuation, etc. But once you get ...
Apr 25, 2013 -
Re: A Siren's Chain
I like it, but it kind of lost me at a few parts. It is a little bumpy, but with a little bit of revision, it would be a really ...
Apr 25, 2013 -
Re: You Are Not Alone
I agree with ladcat13, the poem IS very inspiring. It made me feel happy about myself when I read it. I also like how it talks about the choice you ...
Apr 25, 2013 -
Re: The Laughter of a Hyena, Chapter 1 (rewritten)
Hey KevybearsBunny! BookLover33 here! I love this piece of writing! The plot and story is good, but I think that you need to go back and look through your grammar ...
Feb 28, 2013
