BlueSunset

Hello, Snazzy! My first impression: "Aww....This is so touching!" Bravo. The only thing I would consider changing is the stanzas. Your first stanza is: This is a poem, That is ...

Sunset here for a review! Give yourself a pat on the back, Snazzy! This is clearly a wonderful peice of work! Though I have nothing to edit in this poem, ...

Woah. This is a pretty decent size poem. You should give yourself a pat on the back, not only for that but for this wonderful poem. Okay, moving on. Though ...

Hi there. When I first saw this, I thought: Wow, you got inspired by a pine tree outside your window. That impresses me. Normally when I write poems, I make ...

Hi! Sunset here, again. I'm back again to review a wonderful writer! :) Lets get started. The righteous man then rises and joins his Father I don't see any need ...

Hiya, Tigerlilly! What a cute poem. I have to say that this poem reminds me of a book called 'I hate cats'. The words were mixed up like yours. The ...

Hi, here to review! I would like to point out a couple of errors I found. When you said: With time I recovered And stepped out of the dark world. ...

Hiya, Sunset here to review! This rhyme thing is confusing me. Is there a certain pattern in it? I didn't see one. Your first stanza, as I remember it, didn't ...

Hi! Sunset here for a review. What a nice short! I especially love the ending; it is probably my favorite part. The idea of having the story in Hermione's point ...

Hello! Now, lets start. So first, your ryhming is a bit funky in that poem of yours. You did a great job on matching words together that would rhyme, but ...

Nice! Very intense and strong! I like the repetetive lines First, the winter Second, the spring and etc. I like the seriousness of these lyrics. This is the first lyric ...

Hello, here to review. First of all, I found several mistakes here and there. I'm not that picky about small errors, but I just wanted to show you them. Here ...

Ok, nice first chapter. You do have one error that I found, atleast that I think is an error. Anyways, when you said, "Behind him, Zion could hear Eternal muttered ...

Great story! You really added detail to every sentence and though about your wording. Wow, just wow. I like the names you picked for your story, they definetly fit well. ...

Hello! So, wow, nice poem! Love how you ended each stanza with "this is the school of chaos" it really caught my eye. Nice rhyming, too. I wouldn't have changed ...