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I dont know why but this song just gets to me. I feel like I can relate to it but in a really weird way. I would love to know the actual tune to this! I love the comparisons of different things and it's really well written. Keep up the amazing work my love!
Hello!
The repetition in this was very well done. You didn't over-do it like so many seem to do. That ending was splendid. It send shivers down my spine. I can feel the rhythm you meant for this, and I can see you spent a lot of time on this. Great work! I have no suggestions for change. Brilliant!
For some reason I read some of the lines in Mickey, Donald, and Goofys' voices... XD
Wow, didn't even realize that this was your work, Ark XD
Interesting lyrics though...? Sorry, I'm no good with lyrics and poems and the like. Short stories are easier for me to review so here's a smiley face for you!
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Hey. OMG! I love this lyrical words. To me the words make sense. I love lyrics, but yet for some reason I don't read them a lot. In my opinion they lyrics are sort of like a poem, but more repetitive. Sometimes they can be very little, but this one has emotion, and I love it. So I didn't catch nitpicks. I really feel like this has emotion, and it's just.... Amazing. There are no really descriptive words to describe it. (That's a comment)
Everything was good. No real big errors.. At least I didn't see any.
Keep up the good writing,
Love,
Dogs
The main reason I don't like lyrics is they're too repetitive and shallow, so I usually turn to poetry.
But man did you defy those standards!
I love the theme (morbid and dark- always a fan of that), and your words are rhythmic and rhyme-y, as they should be for lyrics, but lack no poetic...ness at all. xD
I'm sorry my words today aren't working in case you couldn't tell.
Gah. Love it. Keep writing.
I don't really have any suggestions at this point.
Yours,
~iron.n
Nice!
and etc. I like the seriousness of these lyrics. This is the first lyric that I've read, and wow! I'm impressed.Very intense and strong! I like the repetetive lines
I don't really mind about errors or anything, and I didn't even spot anything wrong.
Spelling- none
Wording- great!
Rhyming- great again!
Nice reviewing for you, and keep it up!
- Sunset101