Bella

Heya! I really liked this, especially the way you (as the title suggested) flashed back from present time to small chunks of memories. I think it added to the story ...

So, I liked this, to some extent. I won't repeat what Cade said, so it leaves me with not so much to say. There was, however, one line that really ...

Hmm... I like the poem itself. Your wording is wonderful, so I really like that. My only suggestion would be to work on the flow. I had some trouble reading ...

Well, I don't really want to eat you, and I can't manage to go through and critique this full thing. I'll try to sum up my critique, without being too ...

It's very repetative. Perhaps it could be reworked somehow, so that you get the point across in a more effective, less repetative way? I like the idea though -- probably ...

This looks pretty interesting, but it is posted odd. I'm assuming you copy/pasted this from Microsoft Word, or another typing program. If you could space it out better (spaces between ...

My apologies for any repitition! Love comes in many colours, giving a sky to all its emotions. From happy moments to tearful thoughts, love conquers all. Its one emotion that ...

We both walked out of the cinema slowly and I was tryiing to remember that glorious moment as best I could. What moment? Is she trying to remember the walking ...

I really did like this a lot, although I have one comment. Near the end, you mention Dinah hearing Joseph's heart beat. If he's a vampire, does he have a ...

Lost Lovers…. I walked in to the living room, tears running down my face. I sat down on the couch, and turned the TV on. It was on news, I ...

Hello , I am Max Madison. What you are soon going to be reading is a little awkward because it can't really happen. At least that is what some people ...

Alice, dear, this was uber great. I love the plot idea and everything. And I already told you it made me cry, and that's a compliment in itself. As for ...

I love your sense of description...I can so clearly picture everything. It shows how much the narrator pays attention to the Art Boy. he was always to busy drawing to ...

Crispy---there does not have to be sex in a romance for it to be good. Sex is not romance, sex is not love. Sex is something you do only with ...

I really liked this -- it was so...catching! It started out seeming semi-romantic, and then suddenly became sad. Brad, you have a gift! :) MERRY WRITING! Bella Also, ignore those ...