Audy

Hey Jordin, Strangely enough, this reminded me of that song from Lion King, "Upendi" xD Don't ask me why, I guess there's something similar in the lyricism and the use ...

Hey Frayer! I, like most here, really do think there's a great idea brewing here, I think it has a lot of heart behind it. I'll agree with Luxury, I ...

Hey Embers! I'll have to be honest, it was really hard to read because it's all just in one big block paragraph, and mostly it was just describing the pain. ...

Kitty! :) I feel like it's been a while since I've reviewed one of your poems, though I was eagerly reading through all of them during NaPo! This one reminded ...

Hey Rosan, Nice rhythm you've got going. I think you have a great handle on rhythm and rhyme and I'm actually pleased with the way you're breaking your lines as ...

JonQuil, Hey great story! :o There was a really humorous narrative that captivated me in this - I think it's macabre with a hint of dark humor which is always ...

Hey Unicornsmilz! Interesting poem about time, I can definitely relate to the speaker here, if only time can stop and we can actually enjoy the moment, heh xD I immediately ...

Hey Mindblown, I actually really like this poem XD I thought it was really cute and had a childlike/lullaby quality to it. The blue turtle image really fits with this ...

Hey Mindblown! This is a relatively simple poem - but I don't think that's a bad thing, I think to do a simple, clean poem well takes a great deal ...

Hey Waarheid, It's nice to meet you! I'm Audy, I'll be digging right into this today. If you have any questions or wish to chat this up, just shoot me ...

Hey Gianinepantig, It's great to see you out on the poetry boards! I'm Audy and I'm usually here quite often, so nice to meet you ^_^ Now, let's dig right ...

Hey Sparkie! Love the conflict and drama here! It's wonderful, like a juicy gossip as soon as Daniel walks in and starts ranting about his problems and you just know ...

Hey Love, I'm just stopping by for honest feedback. If you want to chat it over some more, or if you have any questions at all, just shoot me a ...

Hey Speakerskat, You've definitely improved loads. You have a much better command of flow and rhythm -- I particularly liked the slant rhyme in the first stanza: friends/in. You also ...

Lovely style you've got here, Spinelli. I think what you've got here from the very first sentence and up to the very last is the essence of story telling. It's ...