AstrangedbeaR

The opening was good, but the sentances that followed seemed too much. In the first paragraph you crowded me with too much information after each sentance. I could...., I never...., ...

for a first attempt at poetry, this is pretty good. i'm guessing, on the second line you missed out "me" on "follow down to the darkest blue" it didnt flow ...

this is good. i actually had a sister called ella who died, so when i read this it reminded me of her. but yeah, this is good, it was the ...

Wow, well i liked this. I think from: You can't deny my existence, I don't understand your perplexity Of why standing so close to me creates it's own ecstasy I'll ...

I like this first line, it brought me into the second stanza I look at her and stare; deep into her eyes the third stanza i foudn it hard to ...

i like this, although it reminds me of a song more than a poem. i think it's the "oh" that you included it made me want to sing for some ...

nice. i like it. expecially how you broke down the words towards the end i somehow felt the emotion there, kinding dropping down, and the first two lines is a ...

wow, i like this. i love the first line, it pulle dme in and forced me to read. nice imagery describing relationship with computer and love. Love this line: the ...

awww. lol. this was cute and nice (has a tendancy for saying cute btw) nice wrds used, rythmed (gah...cant spell) well. some of the sentaces were a tad short though, ...

i enjoyed reading this. it was ver good. first two lines of the first stanza seemed forced...the first line longer than the rest and the second one the shortest, however ...

O.k, well i'm not gonna be harsh...this was wasn't really that bad. It did seem like a euology that goes on...loses the touch and then tries to rebuild it at ...

nice, sad yet nice. dont really know what the title has to do with it? nice title though i like it, although it's in french something about thank-u. bearing in ...

wow...this is an excellent ballad...i love it, definatly sends a message across...(dont trust strangers). i was really drawn into it, and i think its good how the last stanza is ...

nice, i liked it. not fully sure on the repetitive questons, i have a thing for that. but that's jsut me anyway. not particulairy sure about the title, maybe something ...

wow. beautiful. i'm actually taken back, its kinda strange but with this poem i could actually picture myself there with the butterfly. nice choice of words and nice cheme you've ...