Asith

Hi! I really like how much emotion you've put into such a small piece. There's nothing that hits the heart strings more than the death of a beloved pet; it's ...

Hi! I see the effort you've put in to creating a story with a moral here, and it's commendable. However, I think it's very rough around the edges -- but ...

Ooh, an old piece jumps into the green room? And on review month too? For the record, you've posted this under poetry, but I didn't read it as such. And ...

Hello! You've got a few reviews already, but I really want to review this piece, and it's review month anyway :p Firstly, I love what you've got going on here. ...

He, if you're planning on continuing this idea into something, I'd totally suggest that you do! I really liked the premise, even though it's not generally the type of thing ...

Hello! You've already gotten a number of reviews for this piece, but I liked it so much that I had to give my two cents! Firstly, about the vagueness. On ...

Hi! Your title drew me in :) I have to commend your commitment to the weirdness, and the fact that you've actually pulled it off pretty well. At the beginning, ...

Hello! I just wanted to say that I really liked the way you've written a story about a lie without ever telling the reader exactly what the lie is. It's ...

God, I love the personification of things like pain into ethereal entities! Honestly, if you're going to continue this series with other "friends" of fate, then I'd absolute love to ...

I really like this! A very fun piece of flash-fiction, perhaps even speculative, which is my personal favourite :P Your premise is already golden, so here's some nitpicks about the ...

Hello! While I didn't dislike this piece of flash fiction entirely, I think some revision could help. Well, some revision at least, because I did already enjoy your general premise. ...

I like the emotion in this! Unusually, I actually like the weak structuring and chaotic writing you've used. It does actually help to bring out the believability of the purpose ...

At first glance, I wasn't actually thrilled at the prospect of reading this, but it turned out to be really nice! Your strength is clearly in the way you build ...

This is nice. As far as short stories with obvious morals go, they're usually good when they're done right. Yours is good, with a few areas of possible improvement. Firstly, ...

I adore this! Every so often I'll come across a poem that I love so much that it makes me re-evaluate how often I should try reading poetry. This is ...