Young Writers Society

I really like this! A very fun piece of flash-fiction, perhaps even speculative, which is my personal favourite
Your premise is already golden, so here's some nitpicks about the way you've actually written it:


*It's especially the case for stories as short as this, but should apply almost everywhere: use vocabulary well! Look at these two sentences:

Light considered, pondered, and answered,

Darkness pondered for a moment, and responded,

Like what GrayButterfly said, you do explore an interesting concept here, personifying Dark and Light, polar opposites at first. Let's get into the review, shall we?

''Why are you loved[,] light?'' Darkness wondered.

Light considered, pondered, and answered,

''No,[;] I am hard, cold, [and] the greatest teacher[.] a[A]nd, you Light, are the hope of dreams, the fire inside, the healer of the wounds. What does that tell you?''

''And that is the truth of the world. Where I leave happiness joy and ignorance, you leave sadness pain trauma and knowledge, of ages.'' Light answered thoughtfully. ''It's you who bring true rejoicing by giving reason for it.''

Hello! I love how thought provoking this is. It's almost other worldly because it's not something the average person thinks about. This is a cool concept, and I like how you did not make darkness complete evil. The reason I say this is because you mention God when darkness first talks about Him. That because God created everything, he also made darkness as a place of sadness but also knowledge. That even in darkness, God is there. On a spiritual level, I find that very interesting. In terms of believers, or even people who don't believe, I think people often forget who they are or why they exist. Ahh, see how this creates discussion?

I realize that this is a conversation between light and darkness, but it doesn't seem like it has a common theme. What are you trying to say through this? What is your goal? What do you want your readers to take from this? You start by the darkness asking the light "Why are you loved?" and by the end you begin to talk about God. If God is mentioned, shouldn't He be put at the beginning? If you choose to revise this, I would recommend writing your discussion out before you type it. I mean this on a very basic level. You don't have to write out specific quotes, just general points.

I hope this helps! Keep writing!