Ashkitten83

Thank you for the review. I will be making the corrections soon. This,was just a rough draft so I didnt get a chance to edit it much before posting it. ...

Thanks for the detailed review. I will make some changes, it was my first draft. I just really wanted to get it down, but yes I will take your suggestions ...

This could be a book series and the music battle could be the end of the first book. I love the characters, and I can't wait til you write more!!!!

I edited my review so it's a bit less confusing, I have since, found out how to post samples of your writing, to make them separate from my own. Hope ...

Thank you. It was a writing challenge, I had to write a story using 20 specific words, and I wasn't supposed to go over 500 words which I clearly did ...

@don Adding an s after melt would be grammatically incorrect.

The rest of the story yes, but not the story given. The reader can come up with there own ending, but as for them to come up with the whole ...

Noted

Love it. 2 lines of brilliance.

You said he had a crush on her, therefore romantic feelings are involved. Platonic means devoid of those romantic feelings.

I do appreciate you taking the time to review my work. I lazily did not separate the stanzas and for that I apologize. In poetry the rhyme scheme can change ...

I don't have a bunch of time to make this grammatical review but you requested it so here it is... Heart should be hearts. I'd put a period after burned. ...

I knew it, brilliant and wonderful, please keep writing!!!

Well I assumed she was a vampire because of her affinity for the darkness and her aversion to the daylight. And when you mentioned the moonlight in his story, twice ...

And left the theme underdeveloped* is what I meant to say