Young Writers Society

Absolutely amazing. I really really like your descriptions and sophistication in vocabulary. I just love love love it. I could picture everything and I felt like I was thrown into the moment with the story. The idea that you are kept within a mind-tight prison makes the atmosphere dark and yet very interesting for the reader. The bars are within us all and you explain it to us, you create a relatable read for the reader to enjoy. I can't wait to see more of your fabulous work. The ending is powerful, the message is memorable and the wording is beautiful(woop made it rhyme). Ah, such a good read -Marshymallow x

Hey there..

I liked how you described the emotions here, though your realization part was not well expressed. The last one, where the whole thing comes out. But honestly, it is quite relatable.

" Locked up, so the world can never know who I really am. A mental breakdown blurred in chaos and confusion. Its my own story I can never tell. Its my own secrets that can never be known. I now look at my dark silent prison as a place where I am safe. It is my santuary of peace and solace. "

Best lines, according to me. Really, the lines before these were quite plain. I prefer something stronger in that part.

But I liked the ideology, it is common but it isn't bad after all. Why don't you add something more to this? Like more content? You have enough structure and all though.

". I was alone and seclusion was my consequence handed out by my captors. I try to think if I had any deep secrets hidden within that would cause such an action as solitary confinement to keep me in silence. What story could I tell that would go to all this trouble to keep me from telling it."

Good expression here too, I would've liked it more if you'd have added more content to this too.

Anyways, well written.

Stay blessed. xoxo