Andrea2676Marie

I like the originality of this piece, and I also like how you were able to put this much emotion into a small segment of writing. However, it is kind ...

I really enjoyed this. It was an amazing read. The time period you set the story in is one of my favorites also. You were able to pack a lot ...

I like it! It's very original, and I think it has a good amount of potential. I wish I could put some music to this, and jam it out. Keep ...

Bunches of originality packed into this! Love it, I really do. I enjoyed reading this very much. It is a very creative piece, and I'm glad you decided to share ...

An excellent start to a story. I like the idea behind it all, I think it's really original. Good job. You should re-read and check a few minor grammatical errors, ...

Love John Lennon firstly. And secondly I like the emotion in this short. I think you could really expand on it more! Or at least I encourage you to. My ...

I like this poem! Your word choice is great, and the lines flow pretty well. I encourage you to write more, and possibly start a short story. I really like ...

You've got a lot of emotion packed into those lines. I love the style of writing, and it really flows together. Your word choice was phenomenal, and it really brought ...

Great job! Honestly, this is really good. Your sentences flow together really smoothly, and your word choice is phenomenal. I strongly encourage you to continue writing, and try to expand ...

I like where this is going, and I strongly encourage you to keep expanding on the idea. It's very original. My only piece of advice would be to re-read this ...

Love it! Great idea, and very original! I really love the way you are making these sentences flow together, and I can't wait to read more! The characters are developing ...

There is a good idea here. I like the basic concept. However, there are some minor grammatical errors, but that is easily fixed. I suggest to re-read through this and ...

I really like this. I feel that a lot of people are afraid to be so blunt and put themselves out there. You did a great job, and this poem ...

I smell what you're stepping in here. However, I feel that you need to expand more on the idea. You have a great base to a longer story. Also, I ...

I like it. I think some of the lines could flow a little smoother, but the idea behind it is good. I love Alice in Wonderland. I encourage you to ...