Well, my names not Alice,
but I know how she felt,
When her world started turning,
into something else.
Her curiosity led to insanity
when she discovered an
undiscovered world.
Was it a figment of her imagination,
or a place that's been
there since creation?
Alice was a dreamer,
someone out of touch with reality,
interlocked with fantasy
When she jumped,
she probably thought she could fly.
Landed in a world of surrealism,
where what you see
and what you hear is nothing
like what it seems.
Everything's got a moral if only you can find it
In future Alice, watch your step, there are way too many rabbit holes
you never know when you might fall in one
and enter a world of senseless madness.
That was so good!! I adore the idea of Alice being too imaginative!
"In future Alice, watch your step, there are way
too many rabbit holes, you never
know when you might fall in one "
They are some of my favourite lines in this piece and I think, those with the most meaning to them.To me, they seem like you're telling people to be careful where you go in case you don't like it and/or find it totally surprising to you! Just what I think anyway.
Well, I am here to review. I think that some people missed some spots. Let me see...
Well, my name[bold]'[/bold]s not Alice
In [bold]the[/bold] future[bold],[/bold] Alice
This is great!
I really enjoyed this piece- you paint Alice in a very original light.
Just watch out for spelling mistaakes such as "neverknow" at the end, there.
"Alice was a dreamer,
someone out of touch with reality,
interlocked with fantasy
When she jumped,
she probably thought she could fly."
^this was my favourite stanza, you paint Alice in a unique light, as someone who's not quite with it and who prefers to live in another world.
Great job 
I like it. I think some of the lines could flow a little smoother, but the idea behind it is good. I love Alice in Wonderland. I encourage you to try to write something longer, like a short story about this. It's hard to not copy the movie or book, but if you can find an original idea to make a whole story out of, I would gladly read it. As always, good luck to you and your writing.
Well..I might not point out mistakes or stuff similar to that cause others have done that..but I would say..it was refreshing.
What I loved about it is not only the simplicity, but also the comparison of reality like in the last set of lines, though something disturbed the flow.
Everything's got a moral if only you can find it --- it would work better without 'it'.
Though, at times, it seems like you rushed it or ended it too soon, you missed out many other elements of the tale, which could've been included. More work on it, it could be amazing...and much better.
Overall, I loved it, keep up the good work..
WOW
That was absoloutely amazing!! I love the idea of Alice being insane or too imaginative!
"In future Alice, watch your step, there are way
too many rabbit holes, you never
know when you might fall in one "
They are some of my favourite lines in this piece and I think, those with the most meaning to them.To me, they seem like you're telling people to be careful where you go in case you don't like it and/or find it totally surprising to you! Just what I think anyway.
However, I do think that some lines were a little too long to have made a really good rythm to it? Maybe if you just shortened them or adjusted them so that they were different, it would have been a really cool piece.
Hi there. Welcome to YWS!
I like your ideas here, and I'm glad I decided to read this poem. When I saw the title, I was a little leery; it's not original, and it makes me nervous when things aren't original.
Perhaps you could change the title to allude to something within Alice in Wonderland instead of using the title of the book itself. Something like "Down the Rabbit Hole" or "Cheshire Cat Grins." (those might not be very good examples, but you get the idea, right?)
Since this is poetry, you should organize your lines into stanzas of four instead of stanzas of two very long, unwieldy lines. Other reviewers have left their suggestions for this; I'll let you look at their advice. It's good advice.
Her curiosity led to insanity when she discovered an undiscovered world
Was it a figment of her imagination or a place that's been there since creation?
Landed in a world of surrealism, where what you see and what you hear is nothing
like what it seems.
Hello! I have some suggestions to make
First of all, I liked the first stanza of this poem; how it rhymed, how it flowed. But after that things started falling apart. After the first stanza, pretty much all of your rhyming is gone. Also, I think that the poem might flow better if it was formatted more of something like so:
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Well my names not Alice
but I know how she felt
When her world started turning
into something else.
Her curiosity led to insanity
when she discovered an undiscovered world
Was it a figment of her imagination
or a place that's been there since creation?
Alice was a dreamer,
someone out of touch with reality,
interlocked with fantasy
When she jumped,
she probably thought she could fly.
Landed in a world of surrealism,
where what you see and what you hear
is nothing like what it seems.
Everything's got a moral if only you can find it
In future, Alice, watch your step,
there are way too many rabbit holes,
you never know when you might fall in one
and enter a world of senseless madness.
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I think that when the poem is formatted more like above, It gives it better flow and the rhymes that you made come out. Although, I like the story and thought you put into this.
Keep it up!
~Rainn
Hello there Infinity! Dogs here with your review today. Firstly if I may say... that Alice and Wonderland is MY FAVVOORRRIITTEEE MOVIE! I also love the name Alice... =D So I am a huge fan of this topic right now. However there are a few things we might need to touch up on before this becomes a masterpiece.
Ok, I'm not a huge fan of the beginning but I certainly don't hate it. I think you could keep it as is and you'd be fine. I certainly think it could be improved greatly. My favorite line in your poem is actually "Curiosity led to insanity," I actually think that would be a marvelous starting line. "Curiosity leads to insanity," and then proceed into your writing.
On a separate note, your lines are far too long to create a smooth poetic feel. You should cut most of your lines in half so the beginning should probably look like:
"Well my name isn't Alice,
but I know how she felt
when her world started turning
into something else."
Now that right there is walking away from the more short story feel into the realm of poetry, where you'll find much comfort my friend.
I like the philosophy you introduce into the second stanza, but I think you should morph that thought, elaborate it into more that is the world reality? And everything else that doesn't fit into that social standard madness/ insanity? You could really play with that thought. Ok, so the third stanza you could keep or you could take out. I'd suggest you take out because it's just elaborating on the previous theme.
Landing in surrealism is a wonderful line and I really enjoy it. Again too long of separate lines, you'll need to break them up.
Ok for the last stanza you need to just nail the reader with some new awsome philosophy. I'd suggest you work your way into the fact that our world is actually insanity and madness. It may be logical and confined by conformity... but it's still sheer madness. I think that would be a killer topic you could put more writing into. All and all this is a good piece but in need to some touch ups. I think with some work this could be some of the best writing in YWS. I like the general idea, alrighty keep up the good work! And give me a message anytime if you want a review
TuckEr EllsworTh 
Hey Infinity,
Welcome to YWS! I happen to love Lewis Carroll's Alice, so your title dragged me right in, if I may say, you chose an excellent subject 
I do applaud your experimentation with sounds and rhyming. It's refreshing to see someone bending the "end-rhyme" rules, and I appreciated how you played with slant rhymes, like in the first stanza the felt/else - that in particular was my favorite aesthetic of this piece; also appreciated how you tried rhyming in the middle of lines and trying to jumble up a lot of these rhyming placements. I thought that was very "to the spirit" of Alice, so it's nice that you didn't stick to a hard-fast rule. The only thing that I would warn about though is not to let your rhyming take control of the poem. There were a few places such as:
Was it a figment of her imagination or a place that's been there since creation?
Landed in a world of surrealism, where what you see and what you hear is nothing
like what it seems.
Hi there, InfinityAndBeyond!
First off, I want to welcome you to YWS! I appreciate your comment on my poem, and I am here to return the favor.
I want to start by saying that I am glad I have came here to read this poem. Even though this doesn't rhyme, it flows beautifully. And when a writer can do that, that's when I dare to say they're a poet.
However, I want to talk to you about many things that I think will help you improve.
- Uniformity. I noticed you use punctuation in this poem, but it's not uniform. I'll make the first stanza as an example; you wrote:
Well, my names not Alice, but I know how she felt
When her world started turning into something else.
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