Andrea2676Marie

This looks like the great start of a story. I encourage you to continue with it, and try expanding. I like the topic, and I think you have a lot ...

This is a great start to a longer story! Do you plan on expanding it? Possibly the prologue or a first chapter? I encourage you to do so! You did ...

I enjoyed this part much more! I think your writing developed well into the second part, as the characters developed more. It's a good piece. Also, I suggest just reading ...

I like the start to this. One thing is the description. You did a fabulous job at describing each and every detail, but it was almost too much for me. ...

Alright! I like it! There's plenty of emotion packed in here, and a lot of originality. It sounds like you put a lot of thought into this. I encourage you ...

I think this is a really nice piece. I enjoyed reading it. You were able to put a lot of emotion into this, and I can see that you really ...

I really like this, and I think that you have a really original idea here. I encourage you to expand on it more, and really see what you can make ...

I like the poem, "ghost" best. I really like your style. I encourage you to continue writing, as I would love to read more! Please know that it is difficult ...

Sounding good! I like the way your sentences are flowing together, and the characters are developing nicely. In addition to your sentence flow, the grammar is great also! I really ...

I think you have a good idea here, and I look forward to reading the rest. However, I think it's a lot to take in for the first part. It ...

I love the description here. Also it think you did a fantastic job at bring in a lot of emotion. It's hard to pack so much feeling into poems. I ...

You need to expand on this! I love the idea, and I for one, HATE clowns. You are doing a pretty good job at including the emotion here, along with ...

It is definitely a solid idea, but I think you need to re-read this and try to sort out a few complications. There seems to be time missing, and the ...

Characters are well developed, but can use some more detail. I suggest going to google and typing in "character template for writing" which gives you questions to answer about your ...

So descriptive. I loved this! Write more please!! There is a lot of emotion here, and the way it's been written really touches home. I strongly encourage you to continue ...