Aley

Hello ariana! First I'd like to say that this is not the first time I've read your poetry. I've reviewed it, and just read it before. That being said, I ...

I like this poem. It shows the pain and longing for something past the life style, while still showing the life style. It's not pretty, it's not demanding, it just ...

Hi. I'm sorry it took so long to get a review DX So first thing first, spelling/grammar errors I picked up on. 4th paragraph, read = red. "Fox, the boy ...

So I'm not much of a top bun sort of person. Let's get down to it. The Raven is a highly popular poem because of the type of beat it ...

Hey arianaSarroyo, So this poem has it's good points, and some things that need to be tweaked a little. Structure is fine. You've got the stanzas broken up into small ...

So while I think the idea behind creating an embodiment of these ideas is a something solid, as it has been done throughout writing in history, I think there are ...

So I'm going to be pointing out some of the grammatical nit picky things that I can find in this piece since I'm not exactly sure what it is, as ...

So this poem strikes me as a lot of yours do, rough. I'd like to work with you on revising and punctuation. I know that sometimes you're good, sometimes you're ...

I think this could be improved if you used Cherries in order, for instance, if you had C's on top for 1/9th, then h, then e etc, all the way ...

This is beautifully tied together from start to finish. Although at first I thought gushing from pipes meant something a little more post-puberty, especially with 'rust,' I realized I was ...

A month in the life of a clone family. It's interesting to think about but I feel like this doesn't really focus on something in particular. It's snapshots tied together ...

Commas! .> So with this poem, I feel like it's a really long run on sentence because you do have a beginning punctuation, and punctuation every once in a while, ...

Hey there. This is a really good narrative poem. You do a good job keeping on task of describing the characters, and who they start out as, and the main ...

I can go into a more in-depth analysis with you later, but for now, I'll just say my opening opinions until we can talk about it. Fire would actually get ...

So, to sum this up, you're writing a book called unfinished, and you want us to believe/keep reading, because you cannot finish a book. You then petition us to continue ...